glazecovered

Content: Things like "Ok, for reviewer's sake I will talk about my emotions. They love reading those" [Entry] make me think that you are completely aware that there is no substance in your diary. I don't think that you're really opening up, and that's not a problem for me, but your take on not opening up is being fake, and that I can't click with. I was reading your interview and you said that your life is "shiny on the outside, and dull and boring on the inside." Well, your writing is kind of like that. You skim over things, and you give the impression that they're important enough to write about, but not important enough to elaborate upon. Sorry, I just couldn't get into it. And I did, by the way, read more than two entries. [18/30]

Updates: Very regularly. [10/10]

Errors: Oh...my...goodness. Your diary is riddled with grammatical mistakes that make me want to pull my hair out in frustration. Please try to be more careful with your tenses! You said you wanted to be a writer. Writers do not use phrases like, "I baby-sitted last night" or "We just taped the bag to the door, and when we open it, everybody taked one." I hope you make a wonderful math teacher. [5/10]

Layout/Design: I like this tastic design. The only thing I'm unhappy about is that the menu bar warps when your entries run long. Maybe there's some way you could disconnect it? Otherwise, I think it's very funky and trendy looking. [29/30]

Pet Peeves: No unaddressed ones. [5/5]

Contact: All of it's there. Guestbook, email, notes, guestmap. And it's all on one convenient page! [11/10]

Returning: Probably not. Nothing personal, just...high school was hell. I didn't like living it personally, and I don't like living it vicariously. [1/5]

Comments: It seemed like in a lot of entries you said things like, "Besides, reviewers don't like ramblings," and "reviewers? They can proceed to more emotional entries." Maybe I only saw it a few times, but even once is enough. You're not writing for reviewers, honey. And if you are, then you don't tell them that. It makes your diary less personal and more fake and plastic. I see you got a fair amount of good review scores. I also noticed a lot of reviewers are about your age. Well, congratulations for fooling them. I, however, didn't appreciate it.

Favorite Entries: this one and this one even though it was trite for someone your age and a little macabre, it was well written.

Favorite Quotes: I couldn't find anything that stood out.

Opinion Score: [79/100]
Reviewed by: briar

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